Rough Cut peer feed back P1

Feed back from: Josh Vallely

Does it make narrative sense?
The first clip had no sound. But the second clip made sense and was easy.

Do the special effects fit well with the sequence? How coud it be improved? 
The special effects were really good, it suits very well with the scene. More focus on the ball, i noticed it becomes blury.

Is the dialogue engaging?
Yes, easy to follow. However, I didn't feel the actors mean it, so that didn't engage me much.

What do the sound FX, ambient sounds and music add?
There was no music nor sounds effect.

Is it entertaining? 
Quite, yes, I wanted to watch more.

What would you do to improve the sequence?
Add some music and finish the project.

Feed back from: Tom A

Does it make narrative sense?
Basic sense, can understand that they are talking about P.E. No idea about the conversation.

Do the special effects fit well with the sequence? How coud it be improved? 
Test effect at the beginning would work well in final peice. Ball stop worked well with the sequence featured.

Is the dialogue engaging?
Interesting dialogue fits we with scene. Some dialogue is said monotone so viewer could yet be fully engaged.

What do the sound FX, ambient sounds and music add?
Background nature noises work well to create scene and out into narrative. Ball sound effect made sense.

Is it entertaining? 
overall it is entertaining. There were lots of different shot types which made it diverse, special effect was entertaining.

What would you do to improve the sequence?
Include  more. Add special effect noise & ball throw.
More animated dialogue.